This week we have been doing a new narrative writing about fairy tales this is what I have done.
A big puffing Bigfoot named Hairy man is very hungry and wants to eat the 3 little chickens named Jefferson McGee, Ronald McGee and John McGee. The Bigfoot was getting closer and closer as he smelt them he was hungry he had not eaten in days. Once he got to the 3 little chickens house’s and then he huffed and he puffed and he started to blow the house down. After he tried to blow the house down he failed and then Jefferson McGee launched him away all the way to Ronald McGee’s house. Once he got to his house Bigfoot started to huff and he puffed but he didn't blow the house down. Ronald McGee hit him in the face with a cannon and he stared to fly away to John McGee house. n he got to John McGee house he was so sore and could not be bothered But and then he saw a bunch of wasps come right at him so he ran away and the chickens lived happily ever after.
Tuesday, 30 October 2018
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Hi Austin
ReplyDeleteYour problem started out strong, however, by the end of your piece today it seems like you rushed to add a conclusion! We still have some work to do before our stories are ready for happily ever after. I wonder how you can change up your ending for next time so that our story can continue and we can explain more about the problem.
I look forward to seeing how you change it up next writing session!
- Miss Birtch